
10 phrases that kill an essay from the first line
Ten phrases that make an essay blend in with hundreds of others — and a quick test that will find them in your text. 1. "Ever since I was little, I…" — every other essay starts like this. Start with a moment, not a biography. 2. "I want to help people" — everyone wants that. Say who exactly, and what you have already done. 3. "This experience taught me…" — you are drawing the conclusion for the reader. Show the scene; they will draw the conclusion themselves. 4. "In today's world…" — a first line that says nothing. Cross out the whole paragraph, and the essay will start with the second one. 5. "As Einstein said…" — the first line of your essay should not belong to someone else. 6. "I have always been a leader" — leadership either shows in the story or it isn't there. Announcing it is pointless. 7. "I stepped out of my comfort zone" — a phrase from a corporate training. Describe what exactly was frightening. 8. "I have a passion for knowledge" — means nothing. Name what you read at night when nobody made you. 9. "I want to change the world" — too big for anyone to believe it from a seventeenyearold. The scale of "my neighbourhood" sounds more honest and stronger. 10. "I'm not perfect, but…" — false modesty is as audible as bragging. A quick test: highlight every sentence that would fit any other person, and delete it. If more than half got deleted, the essay is not yours yet.

